When I told my friend I was going to dress up as princess peach for the con, I was afraid she was gonna laugh at me because I was a boy. But instead, she just rolled her eyes "Boring! Everyone dresses up as her.. if you're going to want anyone to look or take a picture with you, you're gonna have to put a spin on it!" I figured she was right, and that if I was going to go as peach, I should dress up how people would /want/ her to look! When I walked through the con doors a week later, I could see my friend turn and look at me, mouth hanging wide open. I walked over, strutting in my fishnet tights as people stop and stare, one guy even giving me a slap on the ass! "So what do you think? Is this going to turn some people's heads~?" You ask, rolling down your panties. "It's going to do more than that, you'll be lucky if you leave with any of your clothes still on!" your friend replied. You giggle, because you really hope she's right <3
Don't switch from "I" to "you" and past tense to present mid-story, but other than that 4/5, good job. Could use a bit more approval from the friend at the end for hotness. Like: "Be sure to take lots of pictures!" she added.
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"Be sure to take lots of pictures!" she added.
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